Haiku Friday: Moles

Here’s my haiku for today, on the topic of Moles:

 

Push the old dirt out
the moles know that spring is near
let the fresh air in

It’s Haiku Friday again. For the past twenty years or so, it has been my practice to write one haiku every day. Every Friday I share a haiku here, about whatever topic I happen to choose. I invite you to write a haiku on this topic too, and share it with me and the readers of this blog. Just write it in the Comments below. The only rules are: 1) your haiku must be about the named topic; 2) you must follow the 5-7-5 syllable format; 3) no obscenities or hate (I will delete those). That’s it.

Writing Tip: Sensory Detail

Use as much sensory detail in your writing as possible. Einstein said, “God lives in the details,” and he was right. If you always use generalities instead of specifics, if you always tell and never show, don’t be surprised if your readers yawn and move on. Your readers’ emotions are activated if they feel they are “really there.” Don’t write flower, write daffodil. Don’t write that it was amazing, write that your dentures fell out of your mouth. If you are writing about a cross-country car trip, don’t write “we jumped in the car and took off”, write “we jumped in the Jaguar and sped off” or “we piled in the pick-up truck and rattled away.” (These are quite different trips, aren’t they?) And don’t get stuck on how things look – remember you have five senses (maybe more). Include what it smells like, feels like, sounds like, tastes like. Sensory details elicit emotions in the reader. Emotions lead to action or change.